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(A game is by definition is a playing activity, when played for real you are spaced out where nothing is real.)

It is three-thousand thirty-one, the place unknown. This afternoon, Trent, Dina, & Rock are three university students are now waiting to enter the largest however, illegal & secretive tournament of the whole planet. This exclusive tournament it is for one fall & it is to create the best cyberspace of the planet. A cyberspace is a space that into a PC is a whole another world where you can control your entire network.

Cyberspace is where you too can become a real live person in cyberspace. With that you get too control the very thing that is the network with your very own ability, your mind. People have created such this technology to interface with people’s thoughts into the PC hardware it very self to secure one’s very own network. Nevertheless, in the year 3031 there is no need to improve any more technology so the officers have out law improving new technology because there is no more need for to improve any more.

Which everyone seems to do fine with that law too? In some every generation, there is one person at random that wants to break that law & this generation is no different. In this generation, that person’s name is a Mr. Gregory Franklin Board. He is a cyberspace tycoon of a popular gaming company named CyberBoard Games. With games, that produces role-playing games in cyberspace. Where you get to choose any character, in the game & you actually become the character. As well, as play the entire game in cyberspace where everything seems & feels real.

However, when you play the game for fun at home on your own PC it is a lot different. In tournament rules, you must finish the game in a single elimination round. On the other hand, that does means that there will be thousands of other people playing the game with you. Nevertheless, they still will be your competition & you have to beat the game before they do. There is another rule too, you can also choose a partner as many as you want as well. However, you cannot choose the partner before the tournament starts you can only choose partners during the game & they can to be multi winners as well.

Trent, Dina, & Rock have had to pay their way into the tourney because they could not enter without any invitation. Nevertheless, they did not have an invitation but they got in the tourney anyway with plenty of cash. The day of the tourney, they enter the conference room. Now at first these three have never meet but have gone to the same university for the same number of years & lived in the same dorms too. As of now, they will get a chance to meet in under the extreme of circumstances too.

Mr. Gregory Board introduces himself to the whole room & brings up a presentation to explain everything. He explains why they are there too. Mr. Board; one is that he says, “You were chosen by some of select personnel to join the tourney.” Second is that he says, “Some of you may have paid your way here with petty cash that your rich Mommy & Daddy gave you.” Third is that he says, “you are champions of champions at my games & I have hand picked you to be in this tourney to continue winning too.”

Mr. Board finishes the presentation & brings the gamers to the gaming lab. He says, “Ladies & gents, this is where I have my thousands of PCs.” He continues to say, “This is also where you will be hooked up to the PCs to play my game too.” He continues to say in addition, “All of you will be closely monitored by my security staff for your protection as well, so be safe out there & enjoy the fun.” His final words “Let the games begin!”

The Games Have Begun
Trent, Dina, & Rock find their own PC to hook up to & start the game. Dina chooses her character as a Kung Fu fighter. Rock chooses his character as a motorcyclist punk who comes with a motor cycle too. Then Trent chooses a Monk as his character. A Kung Fu fighter does not pack much of a hit but does have a very high speed & multiple of kicks. A motorcyclist does have a high punch & head butt, butt low kick & speed; however, its motor cycle makes for a great accessory. A Monk uses its wisdom for strength & it has fist moves for attack & it has ways to use the elements around him for magic.

Trent starts in the woods fields during his game. Dina starts in under water caverns during her game. Then Rock starts in a mountain field during his game. Each person’s games starts out as standards, randomly monsters in groups attack them. That is because to test their skills as masters of the game, which all three have passed the test. Next round is when they get to meet the other players of the game & try to eliminate them. In addition, if you do not eliminate one character before time ones out you unfortunately forced to annihilate from the game. Again all three have passed the round.

The third stage gets interesting because this is where you get to pick your partners. Trent picks his partner, his cousin whose character is a Ninja. Trent has learned that his cousin was in the game so they both decided to be partners with no one else. Why not, after all they have thought that family must stick together. Dina wanted to do this alone so she did not pick a partner. Nevertheless, Dina was very stubborn too. Then Rock picked a group of other motorcyclist to be his partners. Now that all the partners are set, the real games can begin & no ones eliminated this turn around either.

The fourth development of the game is the battle arena. This is where you & your teams pick other teams to battle against in arena’s game wide. In addition, those that loose do leave the game & those that win advance. Again, Trent, Dina, & Rock advance to the oblivion event that is the most dangerous in the whole game. The oblivion event is the whole reason why everyone has signed up for the tourney to begin with. Nevertheless, the oblivion event has only released in this significant tourney. An event you put to your ultimate test & this is why everyone must need a partner too.

To win this event you must strategize or loose. It may be just a game but everything that will happen just might against you. This is where your partner comes in handy because you will need your partner to be there for you all the way through the event. The event starts where your own memories put into the game & used as a nightmare. As well as the, very own life characters or your enemies in this event. This event is a matter of will power. Some players of the game knew about the event & were ready for it but some did not & were not ready for such an event taken place.

During this event of the game is where hundreds of players just eliminate immediately too or surrender. After this event is where the game really gets exciting because there are only a few select hundred players left in the game. Next is the monster expedition. In this expedition, there are riddles unsolved & many monsters fought too. Again, Trent, Dina, & Rock made it to the expedition with fewer partners though. Trent lost his cousin in the oblivion event & Rock lost most of his partners in the battle arena & Dina had no partner. Trent’s cousin sacrificed himself to save his cousin. As well as Rock’s partners, they were just all body & not brain.

During the expedition, you start of with 50 points. The points count down & if you loose them, you eliminate immediately. You however, get more points for more riddles that you solve & monsters destroyed too. You do need to solve most of the riddles to get to the next passage or unlock a door but you do not need to destroy all monsters. Most likely, the monsters are blocking your path though. With all of the rest of Rock’s partners unfortunately after the expedition, gone so it’ all him now. He will have no choice to win the game his self.

Another rule Mr. Board mentioned is that after you picked your partners you cannot pick more partners. Afterwards your partners are all gone your left, no choice to win the game your self. Trent has passed the expedition with the least points left. Rock with Trent was in last place with the least points left. Dina did not make it but Trent & Rock did see when she did not make it she was fighting a monster at the time & could not hold on any longer.

Mr. Board comes & sees Trent & Rock before they enter the next activity although they have passed they are still in last place. Mr. Board offers them a deal. The deal is that if one of them can make it to the finish line before the other 10 players & win you will advance to the final round. He is only allowing the deal because of all the effort that they both put in the game & lasted to the semi finals however, both tied in last place. Trent & Rock agree with Mr. Board’s deal so they both can continue the game. The next activity is a race with the last 10 people left in the game. Unfortunately, the race already started five minutes ago. Mr. Board was just delaying Trent & Rock so they would both loose the race but that will not stop Trent & Rock. After the race is over there are only five players left including Trent & Rock. Trent & Rock did tie again but this time in first place.

Mr. Board congratulated them both & added a thousand points each to their bonus. In addition, includes them to enter a bonus round Mr. Board introduces. Mr. Board takes them to the bonus game that is also there intermission in the game. During the bonus round, takes place in a batch of flowers & a fountain in the middle. Trent & Rock do not know what to do there they think it is a resting spot so they decide to rest. Trent feels if the fountain as if it were calling out to him as if it were his elemental powers as a Monk. Trent goes to the mountain he sees in the water the game playing backwards. He calls Rock to come see & Rock eventually does. The game itself is replaying itself in the water of the mountain. Trent realizes that it is a reflection or rather a mirror of the game & you can use this to review what has happened in the game thus far.

Trent concluded that was the bonus round. Trent concentrates on a moment during the game in which he saw & then it appears in the water. The moment is when the monster attacks Dina. They wonder if they can reverse what had happened & if so how many chances. Trent & Rock nodded & took their hands & grabbed Dina out of the water. It turns out that the Mr. Board later told them it was the fountain of youth but you have to discover its power for your self. That also no one has come close enough in the game to-ever get to the bonus round either. Now that Trent, Rock & Dina are partners they have to face off against the other three in the final. Trent, Rock & Dina have won the final & as multi winners of the game. Mr. Board says that they can create his new cyberspace together. Thirty-One years later place unknown. Trent, Dina, & Rock own the company now. With there new game coming out it is time for the new tourney to begin.

(In a game where life is not real any more but now the game becomes real, how do you play the game?)

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Old 05-02-2007, 05:10 AM
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Hm, I read this and it has a lot of potential. The only problem is that it sounds more like a newspaper article reporting a series of events in great detail. It does not capture my attention. What would help would be an in-depth description of the game, with the feelings and emotions involved. Right now, with this narrative point-of-view, a reader cannot empathise with the characters. A bit more detail will help give more insight into them.

There are a few grammar nits - mainly the use of fragments. They are over-used. Try and avoid using them unless absolutely necessary. It gives your story more impact. A computer spell-checker will pick up on most of them.

Other than that, your story is very interesting. It has potential to become much more. Just expand on the story and it will be great!
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I thought I did use a spell check Microsoft XP Word. Hm maybe the the spell check was off at the time? I didn't give much detail because this is a simplified fiction novel rough draft. If you understand? I like to use simplification because it is more fun to write novels with!
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Ah, that makes sense now. It's a good plan, if a bit predictable (that the three of them would get together in the end). I wouldn't mind reading a completed draft.

As for the spell check, the misspelled ones are words that sound similar, but really aren't. Example: to and too.
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