I too really enjoyed this, even though with the penultimate line; ‘at your pub’ I was expecting the last line to read something like; “in Bethnal Green’.
Lance makes a good point though. With your format set out the same for every poem, there’s no challenge for you, the writer, or for your regular readers as they will know what to expect before they’ve even opened the post. Imagine you had a chapbook out with all your poetry, every page will look exactly the same. The visual presence of a poem is an important part. Often, as the words of something form in my head, I can visualise how I will like it to look like on the page.
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