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Old 03-15-2012, 11:41 AM
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Into a ball of yarn,
My heart slowly unravels,
Dyed with blood and sweat,
From journeys traveled,

And I sew myself to you,
Heartstrings entwine within,
The measure of the moment,
I end where you begin.

A simple patchwork quilt,
Made up of sweet memories;
Dyes that became so faded;
Tales of how we came to be.

Laced with clutching threads,
Bound, I am to you,
Solace within satin,
A hospice within you.

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WOW! A mastery of metaphor which works beautifully! Brilliant, a real keeper! Will nominate this one.
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Old 03-15-2012, 12:36 PM
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Originally Posted by Phyllis Stewart View Post
WOW! A mastery of metaphor which works beautifully! Brilliant, a real keeper! Will nominate this one.
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Well done Yombie! good work!
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This is great, some powerful images Yombie!
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