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Old 10-16-2011, 11:50 AM
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Soft graphite kisses canvas
As slender fingers flicker
Whilst twisting on the mattress
She’s showing naked figure

The artist’s hand determined
To capture her every curve
His pencil picture likened
So her image may preserve

The candle mellows shadows
Which whisper across her skin
Sculpting her in lights and darks
Revealing beauty held therein

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Old 10-17-2011, 08:25 AM
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Originally Posted by Ink View Post
The candle mellows shadows
Which whisper over her skin
Here is your art.


You could use 'across' in place of 'over'.
It infers a nearer proximity.
Engenders increased intimacy.
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Hey Ink,
nicely penned and full of sensuous wordplay. I agree wholeheartedly with Nick, these two lines are perfect and masterful.
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Sensual and sexy...as visually pleasing as a Monet...Bewitching imagery, full of soft sexual tension. Elegant and electric, this poem has the feel of a master craftsman...Peace...Jul
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Well done. Good description of the moment.
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