This is beautiful. I love the specificity of place; not just a creek, but Goose Creek, not just a village, but CamLo (I assume that's a village?).
I'd say I'm confused, though. in the other poem, washutt, it seems like the two subjects are on the same side; in this poem, like they are enemies.
At any rate, both poems are deep and moving, and I have no suggestions for improvements. I always enjoy reading your poems, Waterpoor.
I saw no God, nor heard any, in a finite organical perception; but my senses discover'd the infinite in every thing ... I cared not for consequences but wrote." ~William Blake
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