You Walk On By

[rescuecatsrule]

I wrote this one for a rescue centre about 3 years back.


You Walk On By

I'm sat in my pen
With people all around
Wondering who to look at
I look at you
But you walk on by
Without a glance.

I'm sat here, lonely and afraid
Looking out at you
But you don't seem to notice me
And you walk on by.

I'm sat here wondering
If any of you will look at me
But no
You walk on by.

I'm still sat here waiting
For you to take me home
My old life was hard
But not as hard as watching you
Walk on by

I can't help my fear
I can't help my past
So I wish you would
Stop and look at me and
Not walk by

I've been here so long
Watching all of you people
But you don't notice me so
You walk on by

[ScribblerKing]

Ok...now I'm sad. Feel a little like Eeyore now sullen and underappreciated.

Sad maybe, but very true and poignant in its poetic charm...we all "walk on by" in so many situations when we should stop and ask "what can I do?" Animals are too often the afterthought, the punching bags for people who are either mean or ignorant (or both)...

I take a moment...drink some hot chocolate and read it again...

[evilclonier]

There is a lot of truth to this. It represents the fact that we are often so enclosed that we either don't notice, or ignore, others who are in distress. The way you brought emotion across in the poem was very effective. I especially like how you end most stanzas with:

Originally Posted by rescuecatsrule

And you walk on by.

Although I'm not sure why you chose not to end the first stanza with this, I see what you were saying, but I feel it might have been more effective had you ended with a line like all the others.

Overall a very good poem. Well done.