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Old 08-09-2007, 02:31 PM
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This is a collaboration between myself and Voodoo about Culture differences between Ireland and US. The bold parts are mine and italics are Voodoo.

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Culture Clash

Ire, your hometown
grew in the dannyboy fields
singing quietly in wait
for your days of drink
to begin, first in drops
then in storms
drunken little irishman
you're par for the norm


US, your hometown
reeks with oils and fats,
of fastfoods and cafe's
dripping a hail
from salivating lips
Drowning in waste,
to become gross and ugly.


Fein, minstrel shorn
red locks to the bastard's blushing
cheeks, waging home wageless
cause he forgot to tip the waitress
grabbed her ass, as is the daily
woman and kiddies, even the baby
starving at home and forging a hatred
come now, son
your town is painted
glossy finish to the walls
muddy fuckers in the halls


Wretching the obtuse larynx,
loving all the innocent
stupidties exist in life
neglecting the harsh strife
roar at the highest decibal found
causing tourists to run and bound
escape the realities of your pitch
sorrowful bunch of loud bastards...


Money greener than your pissant hills
women cheekier than a mountain of faces
asians and afrikans alike
dream about our landlocked places
smack the little mick around
boy's growing trouble to forfeit the town.


Only two types of you remain
war and anti, but all are guilty
for accepting a leader capable
fooling each one
embaressing your choice to elect
decency but tarred with stupidity,
leaving your trouble minded nation.


Fat raunchy pigs fuck in the mud
cattle spotted masticate cud
money brother.
Swag the poles, forefathers fought
learned the mistake,
"Don't drown in draft, little mick
bullets and triggers
operate quick."


" Guns operate like baseballs,
One per house accepted,
mockery of life, to contain within
homes a destruction withheld,
To end life, intentional and deliberate
contradiction of 9/11, to kill your own
after others kill you
Shame upon each and all of you.


Culture isn't a privilege
Mick, learn your place
money and greed, abound
it's true!
come on, little fein soldier
attack us, our hearts
not our wallets- fat as your mum
Where it counts
pride is and pride isn't
you'll never know
pride isn't for peasants.


You kind treat horses as your own
slanging a Redneck,
strutting and stalking a real lady,
Raping and unforgiving
tainting her life as a virgin no more,
But, there is hope,
as US peasants burn their brains,
while it trains a heap of shitty soldiers.


My brother's a soldier
not covered in shit
he wasn't born on a bar floor
sawdust and pith
never slapped his wife
or fucked a bogan's trailer
claimed glory for his nation
not played a player
nor spread legged a kid
for tarnished ends
Shakespeare was foolish
this rift has no mend.


" Once and for all,
after what's said during fall,
kids remain in baseball,
While whores replace the mothers,
Iraq will still remain undercover,
a disgrace of a nation
killing unborn babies as patients,
an undeserving economy at this pace,
For the disgrace that is the American Race.


Yank say
"In peace shall we dine?"


Mick blithers
"Nay, a fair stein."

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Old 08-09-2007, 02:58 PM
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It's an interplay and as such I don't think should be modified or corrected. Makes me want to break into a chorus of "Fairytale of New York"
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Old 08-09-2007, 03:15 PM
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It was mutually fun for us to write.
Remind you of Speaker's poem, Rob?
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Old 08-10-2007, 02:46 AM
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This is not for me. It's not the structure or the amount of work that went into it, it is the message. I didn't finish the poem but I didn't like the back and forth insults thrown at each other's country.
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Old 08-10-2007, 03:01 AM
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It wasn't really insults, just stereotypical views of each others Country.

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Old 08-10-2007, 05:24 AM
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I found it extremely insulting. It was written to be inflammatory so you shouldn't be surprised if it works and inflames people. When you write shock poetry, don't expect everyone to stand up and give you an ovation. As many people will despise this as those that will love it. You didn't go for mild and bland here - you went for the jugular.
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Old 08-10-2007, 05:27 AM
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I think then, I and Voodoo have achieved what we wanted. We wanted a conflict and controversy at this and I think this type of poem is too few in my opinion.

Sorry for the inflammation on your jugular. I'll aim for the Iliac next time.

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Old 08-10-2007, 05:35 AM
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I don't fault you for writing it and I'm not saying it shouldn't have been written. I have just grown sick of the continuous America bashing and it has moved past annoying to really pissing me off. A poem that pissed people off it not necessarily a bad thing - I've written a few myself. As far as this one goes, it sounds more like an exchange of flaming each other in a chat room.

I look at each poem as an individual entity. Whether or not I like one by an author (or authors in this case) doesn't affect how I look at the next one they write.
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Old 08-10-2007, 05:41 AM
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I main idea was a contrast between stereotypes and we aimed to write around 8 lines each in support of our points, which we did.

Don't think of this as an exchange of flaming because it's not the intention, again it's the above which was intentional.

About American flaming, it's going to get a lot worse methinks.

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It was a "racist" poem to amuse. Little more.

Triq could be nicer, though, to the people who looked at it, methinks.
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mmmmmmmmmmm... not sure about this one fellas
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Elaborate...
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