Very nice! At first, I hated that you left off the meter in the final two lines... but I then saw that it works with what you say there. How can such complexity and depth, the depth of the Other (even if it's a dog) be trapped into a plodding rhythm.
Not that the rhythm plodded, mind you, it worked well. Just that, I think it's brilliant to leave the point undersold, to let the departure from the meter be your emphasis of the point.
It also reminds me of an old poem of mine which I'll post soon.
I saw no God, nor heard any, in a finite organical perception; but my senses discover'd the infinite in every thing ... I cared not for consequences but wrote." ~William Blake
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