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Old 10-12-2012, 01:59 PM
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I'm by no stretch of the imagination experienced at writing poetry, but I wrote this a while back and discovered it again this evening. I've given it a bit of a tweak and I'd really like to know what people think of it thanks! Style/subject/etc critiques welcomed, interested in interpretations too!

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I never said that you were too good for me,
And why bother now, when its all too clear,
How could we fit when you had it all figured out?
Perhaps you were just meant to show me how.

I never said that Id raise your children,
That I wouldve put your chain around my wedding finger.
Id shut my mouth and walk behind to keep you,
If I felt youd smile at me and wed see it through.

I never said that I thought you were beautiful,
But I expected you to tell me I was, and you did,
Frightening power in your hands without my blessing,
I guess I thought you knew and it didnt need addressing.

I never told you I was proud of you,
I watched you graduate and just like that you were free,
We drank champagne and I kept your paper greeting,
And the selfish things I could have tried to stop you leaving.

I wish Id never told you that I remembered,
The first time I saw you at the next table,
But I kept the first kiss when you missed my lips,
Its still in here somewhere; I also keep the shitty bits.

Ill never tell you about the pain,
And I wont let myself remember the beauty.
Maybe Im proud, but its all I can be,
Because I know, Ive always known, that it wasnt you;
It was me.

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Old 10-12-2012, 02:06 PM
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Sounds like mixed emotions? You loved someone but were not in love? And sometimes its a harder situation to be in, because you know you are right to let go, but you are left with the uncertainty of what if? Am I right?
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Old 10-12-2012, 02:20 PM
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It's more to do with personal insecurities/neurosis/pride being the reason for a relationship breaking up, and accepting that you drove someone away.

Well that's what I wrote it to mean, but I love that you interpreted it differently. Always interested in the different meanings of a piece!
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You see now that you have said that, I read it again and can see clearly that it could have meant that.

I guess that is the beauty with poetry, it means different things to different people, its an ability to say what you mean in shadows of words

Its a way to hide behind emotions and keep people guessing what you feel or what you mean and I love it.

You achieved your desired result, well done. Would love to read more from you
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Thank you very much! And thanks for reading

I completely agree, it's what I love most about poetry too - the different ways in which people can relate to it, it's the same with song lyrics I find.
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Old 10-13-2012, 08:46 AM
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I like it. It shows those emotions we often feel but never speak of - well done.
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Poetry is beautiful and poems like this add to the beauty. Your an amazing poet.
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Thank you, you're too kind
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