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Old 08-03-2008, 11:05 PM
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I see a dragon, flying through my dreams
I see a eagle, catching all the breeze
Cant stop and stare, no matter how i please
because I see you, as beautifully can be

I have you, just as i want right in my glorious dreams this day
I find you, and you stare right on back like never saw me
I saw you, with that twinkle in your eyes like you knew was coming
And you stare, look right on through, like i never was there
So i stare, right back at you

I see a dragon, flying through my dreams
I see a eagle, catching all the breeze
Cant stop and stare, no mater how I please
Because i see you, as beautifully can be

The world
Turns round and round
Wonderfully dreams may come true

But i stay
look around
Find i can not have you

So i sleep
Thats a way
A angel watches over me

My own dreams
are with you
And that is how i think of you

I see a dragon, flying through my dreams
I see a eagle, catching all the breeze
Cant stop and stare, no mater how i please
Cause i see you, as beautifully can be

I will see you, a angel in my dreams

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Old 08-04-2008, 11:53 AM
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There are a few grammar errors, etc., but the thing I had the biggest problem with was that the song was mostly chorus. That's a problem in alot of pop/rock songs, and that's what makes them into huge hits one day, and has-beens the next. People memorize the chorus in one go-around, and the next time they hear it, they like it because they know the words, but the third time usually marks when they begin to tire of the song, because they've already heard about everything there is to hear. More substance to the verse might go over better.
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theres plenty of grammar errors which would ruin this if it were fiction. But as a Lyrical piece I found it rather enjoyable to read. I get the impression its aimed at a rock audience.

The verses aren't really in sink like each stanza should have a set pace of lines like 4 or five but some stanzas are larger while others shorter. All in all its a good song just not quite as good as it could be if laid out better.
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