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Old 03-22-2010, 11:05 AM
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Tai Pei sounds like a really cool guy. After all few are the ones who live on something named after darkness backwards.
It's even cooler that he comes from a place named almost killer backwards.

So Vitamin F is a quick fix pill for all the people that want to be female. Well that's just swell.
Can a woman turn into a man somehow? Maybe Vitamin O?


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Old 03-22-2010, 11:08 AM
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Vitamin O I think would work but from what.
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Old 03-22-2010, 11:11 AM
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Maybe from a combination of chipmunk flesh and seed from a Cherimoya fruit, that needs to be made into a pie that one can only eat when the moon turns pink?
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Old 03-22-2010, 11:12 AM
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Okay. Thanks.
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Old 03-22-2010, 11:13 AM
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Old 03-22-2010, 11:36 AM
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Is Arianna tracked Tai or Arianna is tracking Tai? Which one is better.

Can this be better Arianna chased Tai or Arianna is chasing Tai? Tense question. Do tenses need to stay if the past or future when writing?

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Old 03-23-2010, 09:51 PM
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In the future. Always. Dude, first grade English!
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Old 03-25-2010, 07:50 AM
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Thanks. How do I put the story into chapters?

How do narrators speak in stories?

How to write 1st person narrator?

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Old 03-27-2010, 12:51 PM
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1st person means you only have one character...so you'd either have to combine them all into one person, or just pick one to write the story about.
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Old 03-29-2010, 08:08 AM
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Thanks. Is it okay to say in the story that Tai is the villain or say that he was cruel? Tai's father who is Bai died in the other story I wrote.

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Old 03-29-2010, 01:16 PM
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Didn't you already get advice regarding narrators and creating chapters in the Fiction forum? Have a sneak-peek there and I'm sure you'll find what you need to help. Good luck!

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Thanks. How do I put the story into chapters?

How do narrators speak in stories?

How to write 1st person narrator?
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Old 03-29-2010, 01:28 PM
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Yes. Thanks.
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:20 PM
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Actually, screw the post I had written up here. I was going to quote Lin as well where he states Mermaid is a joke poster. Anyway, I don't much appreciate receiving a 'bump request' that's thinly veiled as a request for advice from someone who's wasting everyone's time on forums, when I'm trying to write a critique for someone on another forum.

So, while this won't make any friends for me and I realise I'm not being any fun here, am I the only one that wonders why threads containing crap writing or ones created by joke posters always receive the most posts? She (assuming Mermaid is a she) has 82 posts on her thread in the fiction forum and I'm sure there's several with 0 or 1-2 replies only. Yet she's not happy with her 80 odd replies and wanted me to add another response.

Personally, I'd just suspend her account, so it's a good job I don't have that power.

I'll get off my soap-box now and apologies, but that's something I've noticed on every single forum which irks me. The fiction forums always get a lot of posters praising crap work or just posting in the threads dedicated to it when decent pieces slide into obscurity. It doesn't help the writer either, if poor work is praised.

Oh and Lin, you're a very serious guy with that fat stormtrooper in your signature. (Sorry, couldn't resist the jab at it.)

By the way, like I said, I know I'm not being much fun here, but this really is one of the few things I take seriously. That being, wasting people's time when it could be better spent helping others.
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:30 PM
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:31 PM
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Sure. How about you stop asking a hundred and twenty questions when you're not the only one who needs help, or if you're going to continue asking them, take at least a blind bit of notice what's being said? If you do really need help. I can do that if you can do what I said. Regret being polite in the PM I sent you.

And I don't buy it that english is your first language unless it's really so bad. I found that hilarious when it was the answer you gave. Assuming of course that the bad grammar isn't simply an act.

And please do note I'm really laughing here. (In other words, sarcastic and I don't find it funny.)
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:38 PM
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Thanks. Where can writers do a writing game?
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:49 PM
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Ah, fuck you to be honest. Report me if you like.

Can't really suffer idiots and trolls.
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Old 03-29-2010, 02:54 PM
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I don't like foul language.

Is it better to write in first person or third person having the character write as the narrator?

When a narrator is speaking--How many sentences are good to do for a paragraph?

When writing a character glossary do you always write daughter of and son of the person?

Question about Ellipses--When it okay to use these?

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