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Old 06-07-2017, 04:08 AM
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life is
a bag of
mixed feelings
to sail through it
like a phoenix
choose wisely
what entertains
appealing
in weight it may
not revealing
but the content will
almost appear
concealing
which is endearing
considering to the outcome
it is both
strong and demeaning
because
perfection is not
a meaning

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Hi Nacia, as usual, I always love your poems. But some are so unreachable for me that I can't comment. This one was close, so I took out what I just absolutely couldn't find connections for and left the rest. Hope this helps.

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life is
a bag of
mixed feelings
to sail through it
like a phoenix
choose wisely
what entertains
appealing
not revealing
but the content will
almost appear
because
perfection is not
a meaning
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Old 06-19-2017, 03:27 AM
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KBR thank you and yes I agree your version reads better.
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I like how the words flow together good poem
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