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Old 10-19-2010, 12:00 PM
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The Things I Know


The hottest coal in a raging fire
Birdsong from a sleepy byre
Monsoon rains from foreign shores
Secret keys to secret doors
These I値l find and these I値l bind
Wrap them up and make them new
These are things I値l give to you

May dew on poppy leaves
Salty tears a widow grieves
Woodash from a burning house
Silence, silent as a mouse
These I値l gather, these I値l get
Wrap them up and make them new
These are things I値l give to you

Apples from an autumn tree
Laughter laughed in childhood glee
Lovers sighs and sweet goodbyes,
Jealousy and compromise
These I値l foster, these I値l find
Wrap them up and make them new
These are things I値l give to you

Mayflies on a summer lake
The freshest bread your mother bakes
Stormy skies, lightning bolts
Thund池ing hooves of night-black colts
These I値l buy, these I値l bring
Wrap them up and make them new
These are things I値l give to you

For I am enchanted as the tides
Mesm池ised by a moonbeam bride
I cannot rest, I cannot sleep
Drowning in this great dark deep
I hold a hand, you are not there
I scream at night, you do not care.

Madness and a hungry ghost
Shipwrecks on a rocky coast
Desolation, fear and pain
Every day that feels the same
These you magiced, these you致e made
Wrapped them up and tied the bow
These are things you made me know

You left me rotting in this hell
My fate engulfed me and befell
A feeling that has strength to kill
I hate you though I love you still
Take this now, it痴 all I have
And kiss me as you breathe your last
I致e wrapped it up, I致e made it new
This knife is all I have for you.

ゥMGW 2009

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Old 10-21-2010, 07:08 AM
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The sadness is so full of everything.... nice poem, and strong words
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Old 10-22-2010, 04:30 PM
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I have read a lot of trash poetry in my days on the internet that people say is great (those people that either have no taste, or simply lie). But this is excellent work. I love your rhyme scheme and also your beat is superb. This would make an excellent song in itself. Keep up the good work.

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Heh, thanks. I like the way you built me up for a heavy drop, then handed me a parachute

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This is a very strong piece. Good work
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I really liked it. This poem made me want you to love ME!
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