KBR, you got some damn good imagery here. What I appreciate about your writing is that it steps beyond the traditional lines we often bound ourselves within.
Must all be balanced, measured, and or symmetrical? Why not contrast a smooth abstract with staccato points? True, it doesn't fit the mold, and if you wanted, you could insert a word or two here and there to make it more poemish.
But don't lose sight of the message and the feeling you've presented; What its like to sit in some mundane place and wish you were somewhere else. All the words you choose fit the style. You allow the reader to make the connections without you having to draw it out from dot to dot.
I think the setting is great. A diner amidst arid flats from which you fling the reader towards waves of the ocean. And your title is fitting. You follow the motion of a boomerang as it arcs out only briefly before it returns to its place of origin.
I get it. Write On, Write On,