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01-12-2007, 01:49 PM
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Waiting I sit here waiting waiting for you to take my hand and show me the way to explain what love is to make me feel to make it real i've only seen it dreams never in a reality how long will i wait wait for you to take that step Last edited by CaLieGurl91; 01-13-2007 at 12:16 PM.. 
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01-12-2007, 03:08 PM
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Again - please put your poem title as the subject = thanks
And - please crit 3 for every one you post, and please post one per category per day as a general rule. Thanks. Your poem brings back memories of younger days. You could make this stronger by cutting it a little - but that's my style so take it as such, please - I sit here waiting ─ waiting for you to take my hand and show me the way to explain what love is to make me feel to make it real i've only seen it dreams never in a reality how long will i wait until you to take that step Kit
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