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The Strained Love Song of the Sunflower Queen

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Old 10-26-2017, 12:16 PM
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The synaptical parrot with parsed polysyndeton,
cackling on while seed rattles against the cage.
His pointless diatribe drones on indefinitely,
without a point-of-view,
bereft of logic, and with
ill-tensed verbs
fluttering over him.
Yet lacking modesty,
full of pretense,
and a bit verbose.
"Hey, you're an asshole," he says,
without the slightest hint of anger, annoyance, or vitriol--
just stating the facts that he can't possibly know.
And maybe you rattle the bars,
because he hurt your feelings a little,
without really meaning to do so.
And what he fails to understand
is that you never meant to be a curmudgeon,
but you applied misunderstood virtue
to events that did not concern you.


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Wow. This is a masterpiece of creativity. I want to reread it a few more times to soak up all it's brilliance. The way you describe the parrot, his attitude, and tone of voice is amazing. Looking forward to reading more from you
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