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Old 05-08-2012, 12:21 PM
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grasp is easing up
the once strong hands
are stiff

but old strength
is slumbering in the forearm

the curl and uncurl
of muscles fingers bone
is slower

but the grip can still hold

the reaper smiled and walked on by

he knows the native strength of family stock
that grew for 300 years

in mountains

whose only fame was rock so hard it slowed to stop
the wearing down and breaking up


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Hey KBR,
this has a great strength, the excellent choice of metaphor enhances the message and the tone of the piece. Sort of brought to mind those lines of Dylan Thomas;

'Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.'

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Hello KBR,

I identified immediately with your poem, 'Holding On.' Very nice, as 'Ethan' said, metaphorically. The tempo was nice (not that I am a veteran poet - more a wanna-be). But to tell the truth, I squeezed my middle-aging hands while I read thinking, I understand... I understand. Thanks for painting the projections of your soul!
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Also reminded me of Dylan Thomas. Very nice piece
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Thank you Ethan, Dream-voice and simply_words. I wasn't sure how this one would be received. I appreciate the comments!!
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very good imagery...reads good after second time...excellent after third
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