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05-08-2012, 12:21 PM
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Holding On
grasp is easing up
the once strong hands are stiff but old strength is slumbering in the forearm the curl and uncurl of muscles fingers bone is slower but the grip can still hold the reaper smiled and walked on by he knows the native strength of family stock that grew for 300 years in mountains whose only fame was rock so hard it slowed to stop the wearing down and breaking up Last edited by KBR; 05-08-2012 at 12:25 PM.. 
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05-09-2012, 12:03 AM
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Hey KBR,
this has a great strength, the excellent choice of metaphor enhances the message and the tone of the piece. Sort of brought to mind those lines of Dylan Thomas; 'Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light.' Best regards D
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05-09-2012, 02:53 AM
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Hello KBR,
I identified immediately with your poem, 'Holding On.' Very nice, as 'Ethan' said, metaphorically. The tempo was nice (not that I am a veteran poet - more a wanna-be). But to tell the truth, I squeezed my middle-aging hands while I read thinking, I understand... I understand. Thanks for painting the projections of your soul!
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05-09-2012, 05:47 AM
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Thank you Ethan, Dream-voice and simply_words. I wasn't sure how this one would be received. I appreciate the comments!!
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05-09-2012, 06:50 AM
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very good imagery...reads good after second time...excellent after third
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