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12-29-2010, 05:43 AM
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Still looking.
I have walked in the valley of the shadow of death, and I have feared great ill
And stumbled over stoney ground, where surer feet have fell I’ve known the loss of guiding hand and mourned it’s steady hold And wandered in the desert place beyond the shepherds' fold My prayers have bounced from brass clad dome, to echo in the void My tears and cries unanswered, my faith and trust destroyed The bitter gall of emptiness, of wasted time and chance Chokes the breath and cuts the heart with realizations lance The powers that be, no longer hear, the screams of mankind’s woe The watching eagle eyes of care, no longer see below For in that place where heaven was, there sits an empty hall Recording every echo, of the cries and pleas of all The countless Gods, the Prophet hordes, the Holy men of old Lie unmarked in their waiting rooms, for promises of gold Their statues bear this testament to all who look and stare If one of these were truly God, why doesn't he declare.
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12-31-2010, 03:34 AM
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Hi David. I really liked this, which is unusual because I don't generally like poetry. I think
 Yours, Dela Eden
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12-31-2010, 03:45 AM
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Just thought I'd let you know, I liked it so much that I have nominated you for members' choice
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12-31-2010, 03:50 AM
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Hi Dela,
thanks for reading, especially as you don't like poetry. I like the immediacy of poetry, you can get a lot out in relatively little time. I have corrected the apostrophe, thanks again  Best Regards D
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12-31-2010, 03:52 AM
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Oh, I just clicked on it, read the first few lines, and immediately felt an urge to finish reading it. And read it again. I really liked it.
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