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Old 11-27-2009, 06:43 AM
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i work in a bakery and we have this new donut that we are making for the holidays. my boss wants me to come up with a catchy jingle to sell it. it is a custard filled donut with sweet eggnog filling, covered in white chocolate and sprinkled with green and red sugar. my mood is so humbug i can't seem to come up with anything cheery. any help would be appreciated so i don't look like a dumbo for telling him i know how to write.this is what I have so far, as you can tell, it sucks.

it's christmas time, time for a tweet, so open your mouth, shut up and eat.

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Old 11-27-2009, 06:55 AM
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Well, I'm not quite sure that telling the customer to "shut up" would be a good idea for a jingle. . .
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Old 11-27-2009, 06:58 AM
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When you want to win and the world just wonut
Take a fuck at a frying donut
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Haha! I like that one, swissroll! Hmm...I hate eggnog, so I'm not sure I'd be able to come up with anything that would make customers want to buy it. I'll think about it for you, though!
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Use alcoholic eggnog and you could you sing:

Deck the halls and pass the donuts,
screw the kids, this one's for grown-ups.

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LOL
Good one. *I can hear it now
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Dunk us all our Christmas donuts
Fa La La La, La La La La
Nog and sugar are components
Fa La La La, La La La La
Christmas white and color sprinkled
Fa La La Fa La La, La La La
Leave them out for old Kris Kringle
Fa La La Fa La La, La La La
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You, sir, are quite the talent.
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Grow some nuts; eat our doughnuts.

(note: might not quite sink down well with ladies )
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you guys had me rolling laughing. i don't know which one is the best, they were all so funny but, i think i like yours the best, Q
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Thank you. You are obviously a woman of taste and discernment.
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Deck the halls with Doughnut Sprinkles
Fa La La La, La La La La
Im not good at Christmas jingles
Fa La La La, La La La La
Pass the egg nog in the morning
Fa La La Fa La La, La La La
Im sure any song we write will need a warning
Fa La La Fa La La, La La La
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Encore, encore!
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