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Old 01-28-2012, 10:19 PM
HannahM (Offline)
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RoseTHuman, I agree that perhaps the girls should be more developed, it would add more depth to the main character. I was hoping to get across that the one girl had died, but I don't think that was very clear.

Juiling, thank you so much!!! I really appreciate that.

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