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Old 09-28-2015, 05:22 AM
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Originally Posted by Motley Crew View Post
Creative. Definitely an interesting concept. I didn't like all the cursing. And I think it's a bit rushed. Too much telling not enough showing. Although it aided the confusion of the main character that you seemed to be shooting for. I think it's got potential to be expanded. Hope this helps.

Ensign Commander Cantor Kalmik. SS Intrepid.

(PS.

If you don't mind my asking why IZA? Z's an uncommon letter in our Alphabet.
I kind of slapped this together last night out of boredom. It's been a while since I have written anything worth reading (or posted my chicken scratch on this-here-webby-site).

The Z? Well... it's one of them inside jokes that I don't think I will ever openly explain. Save to say it is just for tax purposes...
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