Thread: Another Bad Day
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Old 11-07-2017, 11:13 AM
Caligrafo (Offline)
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This was an enjoyable read.

The only true critique I would give is that it seems as though the language is fighting too much with itself, at times the story is too formal and in others it’s too informal. You have a great balance with tone but not so much with the language.

Also a “noncrtique” I would give is to maybe give this piece a purpose besides being funny. I say noncritique because this is your writing and you can decide to give it meaning or not but sometimes giving reason to a piece can round out the edges in the characters and plot progression.

But overall I had a great time with this work, just wish I could care about it more.
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