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Forum: Fiction 11-17-2009, 08:56 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,237
Posted By castlesofsand
since this is just fun for you, i'll just say a...

since this is just fun for you, i'll just say a few things, because its a writing site to improve, even for fun.



i noticed you use a lot of extra words or un-needed if you prefer.

he bit...
Forum: Fiction 11-17-2009, 07:25 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 720
Posted By castlesofsand
hello, an interesting read, but there were...

hello, an interesting read, but there were instances where the flow was interrupted by dialogue/speech that was outside of the norm of the story, and so, for me, stood out.

for example. your...
Forum: Fiction 11-17-2009, 07:10 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 644
Posted By castlesofsand
hello as I have not read your 1st and 2 nd...

hello

as I have not read your 1st and 2 nd chapters, I will have only this to go on and so will review as such.

to me you over-described the room..and I couldn't get my mind off of a ticking...
Forum: Fiction 07-18-2009, 07:55 PM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,187
Posted By castlesofsand
thank you all for the help in this piece and my...

thank you all for the help in this piece and my others

CoS
Forum: Fiction 07-18-2009, 07:53 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 665
Posted By castlesofsand
thanks to all who helped with this and other...

thanks to all who helped with this and other pieces

CoS
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-17-2009, 04:41 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
its probably the fine print, hard to see. us old...

its probably the fine print, hard to see. us old timers have to squint to read what someone says, at times. plus titles never meant much to me, i like to look eye to eye, that's how i judge someone....
Forum: Fiction 07-17-2009, 04:37 PM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
not meant to be disturbing, from what i seen...

not meant to be disturbing, from what i seen people were saying this happens a lot by him, once is a prank, after that, it's taking time away from people who read the story and work on it.

now...
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-17-2009, 02:49 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
lol i'm a Bard :) I want a lute and a wagon...

lol i'm a Bard :)

I want a lute and a wagon with strong Oxen on it on which to pull me around this fair country.

giddyup :)

CoS

thanks for the heads up on the change, Tau
Forum: Fiction 07-17-2009, 02:32 PM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
to me, this is a site for writing and improving....

to me, this is a site for writing and improving. if someone posts just for the sake of getting this response, then i believe it does.

you think otherwise, that's your opinion and that was mine. ...
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-17-2009, 02:28 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
lol i understand, i remember when i used...

lol i understand,

i remember when i used to play with the hack/slash programs i sent 15000 error message to one guy in about 15 seconds, i think it killed his computer but then never play a game...
Forum: Fiction 07-17-2009, 09:33 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,493
Posted By castlesofsand
and that is the first step, listening to...

and that is the first step, listening to another's review.

you don't have to listen to everyone, i agree, but when two people say the same thing, the odds are, something is unclear, and as you...
Forum: Fiction 07-17-2009, 07:04 AM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
if they are so obtuse, why not remove them from...

if they are so obtuse, why not remove them from the site?
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-17-2009, 03:48 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
well you didn't understand wrong, it was more of...

well you didn't understand wrong, it was more of me trying to figure a way to put the pauses in and i thought about spaces but every time i put them in it would take them out lol.

lol windows...
Forum: Fiction 07-17-2009, 03:42 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,493
Posted By castlesofsand
hello i used to do this, explain every...

hello

i used to do this, explain every point someone else made, trying to argue my side to it, in the end, i was learning nothing for i thought myself to be correct when in fact i was wrong. you...
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 02:28 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,493
Posted By castlesofsand
ahhh, but the threat? its like if you are driving...

ahhh, but the threat? its like if you are driving a car, you are speeding someone presses a gun to your head and says' slow down or i'll kill you.... well i'm in a 2.5 tonne bullet, all i need to do...
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-16-2009, 02:21 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
no incorrect the ... is for the windows pauses,...

no incorrect the ... is for the windows pauses, that famous 2 mins left but always takes 43 mins.

so it stands as is :)

but am glad you liked it, regardless of the ...

CoS
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-16-2009, 12:16 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
as always

as always
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 12:15 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,493
Posted By castlesofsand
i liked the story here but a few things didn't...

i liked the story here but a few things didn't work for me, could be just me, so ignore if you wish.

the plane, what size was it? hard to point a assault rifle at a pilots head in a small plane....
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-16-2009, 12:03 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
as always, Tau your comments are helpful...

as always, Tau

your comments are helpful and informative ;)
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 07-16-2009, 11:38 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,126
Posted By castlesofsand
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Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 09:48 AM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
its this damn soft heart of mine for the...

its this damn soft heart of mine for the unfortunate :(

i really must rip it out for it does me no good at all.

:P
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 09:19 AM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
wow, you mean i gave into someone? I don't think...

wow, you mean i gave into someone? I don't think i've done that in my entire life.

I thought as a reviewer it would be nice to point out what was needed. the writer either uses it, or doesn't,...
Forum: Introductions 07-16-2009, 07:46 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 525
Posted By castlesofsand
Privet Katerina welcome to the site,...

Privet Katerina

welcome to the site, looking forward to your work

CoS
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 07:41 AM
Replies: 60
Views: 3,798
Posted By castlesofsand
hello [/B][/I][/FONT] the first line,...

hello

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the first line, sounded too cliche, like the movie 'throw mama from the train' it also is incomplete also spelling is an issue, use your spell check and go over it prior...
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2009, 04:48 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,538
Posted By castlesofsand
normally i hate quoting people's comments, it...

normally i hate quoting people's comments, it ssems redundant to do so, but in this case i will as it explains why i thought you mentioned this was a finished product.



but i'm glad to see...
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