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Forum: Poetry 01-01-2009, 10:16 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 576
Posted By piperdawn
Tau--please don't feel that way. It is very...

Tau--please don't feel that way. It is very confusing. It's my job as a writer to make it crystal clear. I appreciate and value your feedback very much.

P.S. Please don't go and hide--I'd miss...
Forum: Poetry 12-31-2008, 07:08 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 576
Posted By piperdawn
Thanks everyone, for the feedback! Sorry it took...

Thanks everyone, for the feedback! Sorry it took me so long to respond--I've been away a lot.

I agree about the capitals and have to admit, it's a bad habit that I have a hard time breaking....
Forum: Poetry 12-13-2008, 03:03 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 576
Posted By piperdawn
Falling

I can’t.
What if?
You don’t understand.
You never met that girl
Who couldn’t
Fall backwards.
It was a simple exercise.
Everyone else participated.
Almost.
The camp...
Forum: Free Writing 10-05-2008, 01:01 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,257
Posted By piperdawn
Oops, I thought I was responding to another post!...

Oops, I thought I was responding to another post! Sheesh, I need to go back to bed.

At any rate, at first I wondered if the gender and age really do matter? I'm not sure that they do to me, but...
Forum: Previous Contests 10-03-2008, 05:35 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,191
Posted By piperdawn
The Dark The dark is different here, in...

The Dark

The dark is different here, in this big house.
It’s deeper, emptier.
In my old room the dark would snug me into bed at night,
Curl up at my feet like a loyal old cat,
...
Forum: Non-Fiction 10-01-2008, 03:52 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
SW, I was addressing something "Onceuponatime"...

SW, I was addressing something "Onceuponatime" said. I know that you and I have similar views. However, I do like America--I just hate what certain corrupt old farts and their fan club have done to...
Forum: Non-Fiction 09-30-2008, 11:47 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
Onceuponatime, there's quite a difference between...

Onceuponatime, there's quite a difference between nationalism and patriotism. I pointed that out very clearly in my post.

Nationalism is what causes people to think that America is far superior...
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-31-2008, 06:27 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
Righttowrite, I believe you missed the point of...

Righttowrite, I believe you missed the point of my post entirely. That's unfortunate.

The flag/the military doesn't give me the right to my pacifism, nor is my pacifist stance always 'easy.' The...
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-30-2008, 08:26 PM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
Actually, Onceuponatime, it's not a way of...

Actually, Onceuponatime, it's not a way of insulting you--I didn't realize you were even participating in this conversation, so how could I have been trying to insult you?

I'm not a descendant,...
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-30-2008, 10:22 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
Righttowrite: Quakers don't swear oaths. Hence I...

Righttowrite: Quakers don't swear oaths. Hence I do not say any pledges to anything. We also believe we are global citizens, not rabid nationalists, and if we would fly a flag it would be one with...
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-30-2008, 04:32 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,235
Posted By piperdawn
I disagree with you righttowrite: I'm a Quaker...

I disagree with you righttowrite: I'm a Quaker and don't swear allegiances to the American flag or any other. I don't swear oaths. I regularly register voters and do all I can to participate in the...
Forum: The Intellectual Table 08-29-2008, 01:05 PM
Replies: 38
Views: 1,902
Posted By piperdawn
He sounds like a jaded and sad man. I hope he...

He sounds like a jaded and sad man. I hope he gets wealth/comfort/whatever he's after from his cynicism.

I do think all the possible plots are out there, but what makes something original is that...
Forum: Poetry 08-20-2008, 04:45 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 2,053
Posted By piperdawn
Thanks, Jarin--I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's...

Thanks, Jarin--I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's funny, I never noticed that I put "my father's army picture and a band-aid" so close together until you pointed it out. . . must have been my subconscious...
Forum: Poetry 08-14-2008, 11:14 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 2,053
Posted By piperdawn
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! :)

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! :)
Forum: Poetry 08-12-2008, 09:21 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 2,053
Posted By piperdawn
Well, I guess it does seem strange formatted that...

Well, I guess it does seem strange formatted that way. The example I was working from is in paragraph form, framed by indents. I don't know how to do that here--I'm very techonologically-challenged,...
Forum: Poetry 08-11-2008, 08:01 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 2,053
Posted By piperdawn
It's a list poem, and the format reflects that....

It's a list poem, and the format reflects that. You have to look within the poem to see that it's more than a paragraph and a list of things.
Forum: Inkster Incorporated 08-11-2008, 05:36 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 1,446
Posted By piperdawn
Whenever someone mentions hooks, I always, always...

Whenever someone mentions hooks, I always, always think of this one:

"Where's papa going with that ax?"

Such a chilling hook for a children's book (Of course, it's from Charlotte's Web)!...
Forum: Lyrics 08-11-2008, 05:10 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,252
Posted By piperdawn
Sorry if this seems harsh . . . it isn't meant...

Sorry if this seems harsh . . . it isn't meant to. All I can think, honestly, is how disgusting coffee breath is. Sorry! I think you need to explain why it's not gross--you just kind of dump the...
Forum: Poetry 08-11-2008, 05:00 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 2,053
Posted By piperdawn
My Mother's Purse

My Mother’s Purse

Lipstick, Pepto-Bismol tablets, cracked sunglasses, my high school graduation picture, tiny bottles of vodka from the trip to Bermuda before I was born, straight pins with red...
Forum: Poetry 08-11-2008, 10:28 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 586
Posted By piperdawn
Glad you liked it . . . didn't mean to spark an...

Glad you liked it . . . didn't mean to spark an argument! :)
Forum: Poetry 08-09-2008, 11:38 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 586
Posted By piperdawn
I separated the two words, thank you for the...

I separated the two words, thank you for the suggestion.

You must be very young or very lucky to not have experienced a painful breakup! :) I hope that you never have to--it's awful.

I'm also...
Forum: Poetry 08-09-2008, 08:02 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 630
Posted By piperdawn
You have some good imagery here. It might be my...

You have some good imagery here. It might be my personal preference, but I think if you pared it down a bit you might strengthen it. For instance, in the first stanza, could you cut pare it down like...
Forum: Members' Choice 08-09-2008, 07:03 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 2,877
Posted By piperdawn
Okay, I nominate "Mousetrap" by Flapjak--the...

Okay, I nominate "Mousetrap" by Flapjak--the version that is up right now. Hope I followed the rules on this one . . . I really liked the story. Thanks!
Forum: Poetry 08-09-2008, 06:49 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 586
Posted By piperdawn
How Not To Get Over A Lover

How Not to Get Over a Lover

Keep his cigarette butts in the ashtray
Picture his lips pursed around them,
His long fingers tapping the filter,
Green eyes squinting at you through smoke and...
Forum: Free Writing 08-09-2008, 06:28 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,257
Posted By piperdawn
I'm not entirely sure of the rules . . . I would...

I'm not entirely sure of the rules . . . I would say maybe you could make your changes and I could nominate the revised version. It was a good read--glad to nominate it!
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