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Forum: Fiction 11-04-2017, 02:02 PM
Replies: 160
Views: 13,789
Posted By Lockette
Soo, do you recall ever hearing about the Fallout...

Soo, do you recall ever hearing about the Fallout video games? I think the armor listed above may be based partly on that, but I can't be totally sure.

Just google "Fallout power armor" if you...
Forum: Fiction 10-24-2017, 02:26 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 588
Posted By Lockette
I think it's kind of funny the only thing I had...

I think it's kind of funny the only thing I had screwed up that you guys caught was sentence structure. I'm mildly elated. :)

This needs some more work. I'll probably go back and mess around and...
Forum: The Intellectual Table 10-23-2017, 02:34 PM
Replies: 25
Views: 987
Posted By Lockette
:clap:

:clap:
Forum: Fiction 10-23-2017, 02:31 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 588
Posted By Lockette
Y'know how in one of our past conversations I...

Y'know how in one of our past conversations I said I might do a series of short stories surrounding a character? I think this might be it. I've got an overarching story in my head. The problem is...
Forum: Poetry 10-23-2017, 02:12 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 282
Posted By Lockette
Capitalize the I in last line first stanza ...

Capitalize the I in last line first stanza
gentle 1st stanza
Accurate in the 2nd stanza.

Other than that, I can't see anything. Poetry isn't my thing. Never liked it, never wrote it well. I drop...
Forum: Fiction 10-23-2017, 02:03 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 588
Posted By Lockette
looking back over this I think it needs some more...

looking back over this I think it needs some more work. I like the idea, but something seems a bit 'off' about it. Maybe too cliched? It seems rather rushed? I can't put my finger on it. It's...
Forum: Tips & Advice 10-23-2017, 01:48 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 4,114
Posted By Lockette
I think, to be good at writing, you have to at...

I think, to be good at writing, you have to at least enjoy it. You shouldn't have to motivate yourself. You should want to! Finding something to write about, however, is something else entirely.
Forum: Fiction 10-23-2017, 01:38 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 588
Posted By Lockette
you've spotted my hubris. I'm terrible at...

you've spotted my hubris. I'm terrible at catching that. Specifically. Anything else is easy to spot, except that. No idea why. Thanks for pointing that out. If I can still edit I'll hunt them out.
...
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2017, 04:17 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 588
Posted By Lockette
The price of life (first draft)

Wilson leant forward, knocking on the door with a gloved hand. He coughed into his hand. New York City didn’t agree with him. The air was putrid. He was used to the country air. You only smelled shit...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-22-2017, 11:53 AM
Replies: 99
Views: 3,327
Posted By Lockette
I'm kinda wondering if something happened to...

I'm kinda wondering if something happened to Nick. This is what, 3 months now?
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2017, 11:45 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 276
Posted By Lockette
First sentence is missing a 'The' or something...

First sentence is missing a 'The' or something else. I assume that was a copy-paste error, though.

The second sentence is a run on. perhaps break it up?

It was never clear how many people had...
Forum: Introductions 10-22-2017, 10:02 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 384
Posted By Lockette
You'll fit in just fine, then!

You'll fit in just fine, then!
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2017, 08:20 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 354
Posted By Lockette
His full name isn't necessary. First sentence....

His full name isn't necessary. First sentence. Either cut out both middle and last names or just the middle. It messed me up.

Another thing. We are chemically wired to think babies are cute. It...
Forum: Introductions 10-22-2017, 08:11 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 384
Posted By Lockette
Welcome! It's great to see new members join! ...

Welcome! It's great to see new members join!

It's really hard to get constructive criticism from friends and family. They always end up just inflating your ego, then when you submit something you...
Forum: Fiction 10-21-2017, 05:54 PM
Replies: 160
Views: 13,789
Posted By Lockette
Not that you don't understand basic grammar, just...

Not that you don't understand basic grammar, just saying that a polished version would look better to a publisher.
Forum: Fiction 10-21-2017, 04:42 PM
Replies: 160
Views: 13,789
Posted By Lockette
Wow. Wow.Wow. I think I'm dying. Jesus. Harold....

Wow. Wow.Wow. I think I'm dying. Jesus. Harold. Christ.

Some of the most powerful sentences I've ever read. the scene a few pages back with Temple is simply masterful. Quick, eloquent, and somehow...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-21-2017, 02:51 PM
Replies: 9,104
Views: 252,730
Posted By Lockette
Seether is one of my favorite bands. Glad you...

Seether is one of my favorite bands. Glad you enjoyed it.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-21-2017, 02:18 PM
Replies: 9,104
Views: 252,730
Posted By Lockette
Say what you will, But I'm digging the crap out...

Say what you will, But I'm digging the crap out of Crossfade today. I like a lot of things, but I tend towards the alternative rock genre. The kind that emulates 90s grunge. sorta.
...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-21-2017, 02:00 PM
Replies: 5,958
Views: 408,645
Posted By Lockette
" Ahh, I see now," Lockette smiled, his tightly...

" Ahh, I see now," Lockette smiled, his tightly drawn face contorting into something that resembled happiness, if ever so slightly. "It's a means to an end, where such an end would be recognition....
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-20-2017, 04:53 PM
Replies: 5,958
Views: 408,645
Posted By Lockette
"If I may pose a question, my ever so gracious...

"If I may pose a question, my ever so gracious host Flea, why do all your posts in other threads seem to be guarded by a pair of Parenthesis?" Lockette asked, seeing no visible explanation. BUt this...
Forum: Fiction 10-20-2017, 04:47 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 279
Posted By Lockette
Oh boy. That was awesome! Great job. I felt...

Oh boy. That was awesome! Great job.

I felt that the pace was a bit too fast, but I like long lengthy novels, so it's a matter of taste I guess.

while the mood was evident, It wasn't really an...
Forum: Research Section 10-19-2017, 04:16 PM
Replies: 44
Views: 11,920
Posted By Lockette
Writing for me isn't really writing. It's...

Writing for me isn't really writing. It's creation. When I start a story fueled by inspiration, I have an idea, a couple characters, and then, I sit down and watch. Watch what? the story. I see the...
Forum: Tips & Advice 10-19-2017, 03:46 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 467
Posted By Lockette
Oh, of course, Brian, we have a local bathhouse...

Oh, of course, Brian, we have a local bathhouse right beside the smithy. As a kid I'd take a dip in the bathhouse and run over to the furnace to see how quickly I could get the water to evaporate....
Forum: Tips & Advice 10-18-2017, 06:28 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 467
Posted By Lockette
Have you figured out how to turn off the...

Have you figured out how to turn off the obnoxious clicking noise? Most phones make that small click whenever you tap a letter.

But otherwise, that's pretty neat. I kinda wish I could do that,...
Forum: Introductions 10-16-2017, 08:37 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 312
Posted By Lockette
In the prison that your 3,000 dollars can free...

In the prison that your 3,000 dollars can free him from. When he escapes he'll promptly open the Nigerian treasury and give you tenfold back.
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