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Forum: Poetry 02-04-2014, 05:32 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 460
Posted By LanceRocks
Just a joke about getting old...there is no...

Just a joke about getting old...there is no "George Truman," the narrator is confused. The public enjoys light-hearted material!

: = )
Forum: Poetry 02-04-2014, 03:54 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 460
Posted By LanceRocks
Hi, Error. This is just for fun, it's a hit on...

Hi, Error. This is just for fun, it's a hit on the other group I frequent. Taken from a study at Tübingen University which made the statement about older people having more data to sort than younger...
Forum: Poetry 02-03-2014, 03:03 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 559
Posted By LanceRocks
feealsz, the highest-level poetry which is most...

feealsz, the highest-level poetry which is most meaningful to the author is never embraced by the public in the way less-important, even superficial and silly works are. Just the way of the world.
Forum: Poetry 02-03-2014, 02:10 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 460
Posted By LanceRocks
Brains Are Slower

...in older people, they say, because we're sorting through more memories
than people who are younger. Allow me to demonstrate.

America's first president, George...
...
Forum: Poetry 02-03-2014, 02:37 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 376
Posted By LanceRocks
Thank you, Error - very kind. The poem is...

Thank you, Error - very kind.

The poem is not a downer for me, personally...just a description of what's it's like to be alive at my age. (No one makes it to senior citizen status without some...
Forum: Poetry 02-02-2014, 06:53 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 376
Posted By LanceRocks
Looking Forward

The sound is on the right inside his head,
it never stops. Not a whine nor a ring, but
the single sustained note of a theramin.

(Electrical, with a slight vibrato.)

To the left a second note,...
Forum: Members' Feedback 02-01-2014, 03:03 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 3,442
Posted By LanceRocks
Rocko, there aren't enough Members in Poetry to...

Rocko, there aren't enough Members in Poetry to do what you suggest. Have you posted to Poetry? All welcome.
Forum: Poetry 02-01-2014, 08:14 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 496
Posted By LanceRocks
AC, this is not so much a critique of your poem...

AC, this is not so much a critique of your poem but rather a general observation about writing poetry.

Here, each stanza says essentially the same thing: flood conditions prevail. The stanzas say...
Forum: Poetry 02-01-2014, 07:50 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 607
Posted By LanceRocks
Excellent first stanza!

Excellent first stanza!
Forum: Poetry 02-01-2014, 02:09 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 334
Posted By LanceRocks
Very well written, Krisjuljen. Personally, I'd...

Very well written, Krisjuljen. Personally, I'd like to see more heart, less analytics...just my own taste. The artist's handle is "Banksy."

Thank you for a fine contribution to this board!

Lance
Forum: Poetry 02-01-2014, 02:04 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 419
Posted By LanceRocks
This strikes me as inordinately competent, even...

This strikes me as inordinately competent, even beautiful in places.

Here are my suggestions, take or leave. L2 above "it" can be removed. L3 above " as " for "like."

Thanks for a wonderful...
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 06:45 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 559
Posted By LanceRocks
This is pretty darn good, feealsz. The world asks...

This is pretty darn good, feealsz. The world asks for originality and here it is.

...WELL I'VE GOT THESE TEN INSTANCES!

Excellent. Let's see what else...

"nocturnal promisian" is excellent,...
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 06:28 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 715
Posted By LanceRocks
Good morning! Written in mid 1970's and published...

Good morning! Written in mid 1970's and published 1982. My other group is looking for "different" things, hence this layout, copied from the original typing. The wet linoleum line is among my all...
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 12:51 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 715
Posted By LanceRocks
How It All Ended

http://randomfilm.com/photos4/ended.jpg
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 12:28 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 2,474
Posted By LanceRocks
Dude, you are missing out. Daft Punk is heavy and...

Dude, you are missing out. Daft Punk is heavy and gets you laid.

(*Ahem*)

Anyway, back to your poem. It's a fucking list, Error: I understand every word because you're just going through and...
Forum: Poetry 01-30-2014, 11:46 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 2,474
Posted By LanceRocks
From my perspective the job of poetry is to...

From my perspective the job of poetry is to communicate what it is to be human across the usual boundaries of age, race, religion, gender, culture and time...all the usual things that divide people. ...
Forum: Poetry 01-30-2014, 05:13 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 602
Posted By LanceRocks
You write very well. Extend your line as...

You write very well. Extend your line as recommended prior and respect for what you're doing will escalate exponentially.

Lance
Forum: Poetry 01-30-2014, 05:07 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 2,474
Posted By LanceRocks
The problem with writing from popular media is...

The problem with writing from popular media is the media changes before you turn 18 - it becomes passe.

Additionally, writing about or from media is a third-hand view of life. There is life, then...
Forum: Poetry 01-30-2014, 04:49 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,435
Posted By LanceRocks
I like what you're doing. You switch from present...

I like what you're doing. You switch from present into past and then back into present tense again: it should all be present.

Additionally, there are at least three separate stanzas, which would...
Forum: Poetry 01-29-2014, 03:27 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 319
Posted By LanceRocks
Fun!

Fun!
Forum: Poetry 01-29-2014, 02:06 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 977
Posted By LanceRocks
Of course this is not the only way to get to...

Of course this is not the only way to get to poetry (wite a poem) - whatever works for the individual is what they should do.

For me the muse is an emotional state, I can only describe it as...
Forum: Poetry 01-28-2014, 04:19 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 977
Posted By LanceRocks
Wish I had a copy of it, but don't. This...

Wish I had a copy of it, but don't.

This was at a small poetry workshop held at a local bookstore. Gentleman recited his poem about the puddle, the rainbow of colors from oils leached up from the...
Forum: Poetry 01-28-2014, 08:15 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 977
Posted By LanceRocks
Not foolish, just a matter of style. I started...

Not foolish, just a matter of style. I started writing in a serous way at age 19. Reading those who write about writing they invariably say the best is concrete, meaning it appeals to the five human...
Forum: Poetry 01-27-2014, 06:29 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 373
Posted By LanceRocks
Very appropriate! Reminds me of my days taking...

Very appropriate! Reminds me of my days taking dates to the Silent Movie Theater on Fairfax.
Forum: Poetry 01-27-2014, 06:20 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 977
Posted By LanceRocks
Well, it's very general. Lest you think I don't...

Well, it's very general. Lest you think I don't understand, I do.

***

Let's get the matter of age out of the way. I don't know yours but you've said you have no children, which leads me to...
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