who knows?

Okay, you ready?
Yes.
Curtain up in a sec, are you sure?
Yes, I'm sure. Would you lay off me ?
And stick to the script!
I do.... Oh man, here we go.

(CURTAIN UP)

Sssh, its a secret, Eros!
One you and I alone share.
Shall we tell them?
Are they ready?
If they dare, Will the world believe?
The truth will strike horror in the comfort they now know.
It, is easy to ignore.
We have already walked the path, Serendipity, the journey is so...long.
We marched out of the Garden of Eden together,
to the ends, to know this.

True Love is brutal, arguably so,
But thank the Gods, Its exciting.
Thrilling as a first kiss.
Tension falls and rises and in between,
Waiting. For my line.
Sssh.
Rushing to an almighty climax.
Once in a while,
Love gets dampened by the tedium of life.
But to keep it alive,
Yes, I was getting to that.
Ssssh Its our secret, my philial one.
Yet, I must divulge, precious.
Total Honesty first will rear her ugly head,
a virtue, yes a virtue.
Rare in this age, but shes present.
Rose tinted.That is beautiful.
Thank you, Rose tinted bubbles are shattered by the onslaught of verbal arrows.
I like the verbal arrows.Good.
Cutting your heart in two.
You are feeling hurt? yes?
Get off me!
For Justice's torch burns so bright, enticing..
Enticing sexy rage and this illuminates the delicious darkened path few dare to tread.
Not rage, He's so erotically male.
Is it worth.....
All the time and effort?
You betcha, Oh I didn't like that! I'm not feeling that Serendipity.
Really? Really.
Some unfortunately are left here, single lonely souls.
Nothing ever comes easy,
Yes, all has a price.
Sacrifice Will offer you her advice.
and its so tragic when good advice falls on deaf ears.
Humph, I warn you,
Don't let pride drown out her pleas.
Because there is light at the end of this tunnel.
Hope. Yes Hope.
Waits for you dressed in a white gown of purity.
How was that?
It wasn't provocative enough and you really lack conviction at times.
Thanks.
I was just being, honest.
Hope, there is hope for all of us?
Yes, my love and her light never fades......

Brilliant simply brilliant!

Why is it brilliant?

I'm really not sure how to approach your poem--while I can appreicate abstract poetry like this, I can't say I understand much about the mechanics and what makes it work.

Just one thing to be careful of: Early in the poem, you write "Truth will strike horror in the comfort they know." While this sounds poetic, when you think abut it, truth isn't striking horror in comfort, it's striking horror in those who know said comfort. I'm not sure how much you do this elsewhere in the poem, but it's something to watch for/consider revising.

I'll try to reread it later and see if I can come up with anything more constructive. Overall, I think it's well done.

Thank you for reading the poem. I'm not sure what makes it work either.
It was for fun, an experiment I don't take too seriously. I will consider what you have said, thank you once again.

Is this poem from the point of two different people? Or is it just the effect of thought vs action? Quite confusing at start, I must say but in the end it's something different which means it's something unique. Interesting.

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The circle is complete..Begin another.

Re-read it, analyze it, look at it. How many aspects of thought or sides do you see?

Let me know. I would like to hear about it. I am not trying to be clever just, interested.

The words don't change. Only your perception of them.
Then, cut it a different way.

i really liked it ,not quite sure if i completely understood stood it though,it confused me a little and i had to re-read it a few times to fully appreciate it,dont know if i interpreted it correctly ,two players on a stage ,eros (love) and serendipity,i guess we're the audience and the stage is life or our perception of it,emotions,ideals or traits(i dont have the right words)personified as players on a stage,pride,hope,justice,honesty and sacrifice.the play is the interaction between these,well im rambling now ,i probably way off but thats my two cents, great stuff